Rap Hip HOp: Rate my lyrics please?

Question

I want a future so i don't have to start dealing drug's
But always's voice's in my head say your dreaming look
Your a scumbag and thieving nut who's only pint's was at a pub
And not the leaving cert your a major dissapoinment
Who fight's friend's you don't even have a driver's licence
Thanks to procrastination your flow's is as bad as satan
But it's no suprize were still waiting for the awaited mixtape
Is it a psychological problem or even laziness
Your surveillant quest's but that don't stop you from failing test's
Are you too far east well then i suggest sailing west
Because your turning into a nameless mess
And **** your excuses your useless not ruthless
If i could come out of your head I'd slap you toothless
Your a mommy's boy's you were ******* spoiled as a child
Wrap up in your safe house always's coiled from the wild
Your twenty now and cash you should have plenty now
And be saving for a fantastic home renting with a partner
Not living on your pedantic own do you think your romantic yo?
Because i don't see you romancing so if you think that
You as deluded as Charles Manson Imagine your
Temple is your mansion I'm your brain invading your house
Holding you ransom and I'm dissecting the lies
Neglecting the cries I'm zane one in our binary jekyl and hyde

Answer 1

I like it. I see no problems, other than your grammar. 10.

Answer 2

some good stuff in there. some original lyrics. go through and get rid of the stuff that doesn't hurt it's supposed to be a battle. don't talk S*** about somebody not having a drivers license just cause it rhymes. but it was hot keep it up

Answer 3

lmao/10

Answer 4

good lyrics, would love to hear you record them on a track, they would be dope i.m.o